I hear you, re Garbled sentences. I realised as I was writing that some of them would be hard to understand because of a level of trickery in the writing, double meanings, and similar sounding words, but I enjoy writing with that kind of prose so I appologise for confusion. One small thing that was perhaps not clear enough, Piggy never did leap doan and join him, instead he leapt up and joined her. It did almost appear as though she lept down, but then she screams, "I don't have to," and Gonzo leaps up and is the force that pushes her back from the tracks. Just a pointer. I'm working on the next chapter right now.