Preview Song from My Latest Fanfic

[ErinAardvark]

I've suddenly had the urge to do a Fraggle Rock version of "Charlie/Willy Wonka and the Chocolate Factory" (I've read the book, and seen both versions of the movie, and I'm one of those weirdos who actually liked all three). I'm giving you guys a preview of a song I tweaked for use of this story, mainly because I want an opinion of how I did, and how I can make this song flow a little better. Convincing John is hard to write! Especially his songs! The first verse is basically the same from the episode "The Preachification of Convincing John," and then we get to my edits. Also if this is in the wrong folder, my apologies.

Fragglettes: Listen to Convincing John,

And all your troubles will be gone.

He's gonna tell it, spell it, sell it,

Just for you.


Convincing John: Now then listen to me Fraggles.

Give your Fraggle mouths a-waggle.

You can chew a Doozer tower till you're blue


Fragglettes: You're blue


Convincing John: But there's a mighty day a coming,

When the food will hit your tummy,

And you'll know that what I'm telling you is true


Fragglettes: Is true


Convincing John: So if you want to get ahold

Of something extra good as gold,

You gotta stop and give a thought to what you do


Fragglettes: What you do


Convincing John: Never eat another tower till I tell you what the news is for you.


Fragglettes: Listen to Convincing John,

And all your troubles will be gone.

He's gonna tell it, spell it, sell it,

Just for you.


Convincing John: Well the factory of Wonka's,

Has us all going bonkers,

Since it's been closed for several years


Fragglettes: Years


Convincing John: Inside someone's makin'

Radish candy for the takin'

No one seems to know what's goin' on, I fear


Fragglettes: Fear


Convincing John: But the factory keeps hummin'

And there's a day a-comin'

That we'll see just what's goin' on inside


Fragglettes: Inside


Convincing John: 'Cause five Fraggles will be chosen for a tour and a real wild ride!


Fragglettes: Listen to Convincing John,

And all your troubles will be gone.

He's gonna tell it, spell it, sell it,

Just for you.


Convincing John: Now that I've got your attention

Right here at this convention

Let me tell ya what ya gotta do.


Fragglettes: Gotta do


Convincing John: Take a bar, just pick it,

And inside you'll find a ticket

Now that golden ticket's just for you


Fragglettes: For you


Convincing John: For you to get inside of Wonka's

And before you all go bonkers

I gotta tell you that's only for five


Fragglettes: For five


Convincing John: Yes, only five little Fraggles will have the tour and the time of their lives!


Fragglettes: Listen to Convincing John,

And all your troubles will be gone.

He's gonna tell it, spell it, sell it,

Just for you.