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Fraggle Rock fanfic: Song Of A Midnight Place

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Redsonga, Feb 10, 2008.

  1. Yva Minstrel

    Yva Minstrel New Member

    I have finally had a chance to sit down and read this from start to finish. While I like the story, I think I prefer your other one (the one you are currently posting). This is a really sweet story, and the interactions between the characters are really wonderful.

    I did enjoy certain things in this though, like the Doc and Sprocket bits and how well they fit with the overall story. I also like the fact that Doc is meeting and speaking with the other fraggles. It was cute to get that sort of feel that he was getting to act as a sort of in-between stage for the fraggles and our world. That bit with the passport was very cute and I loved the wording for cameras. Oh and them using the doggy door to come and go. That was a neat idea, too.

    What else, Sprocket's puppies. That's all so sweet there. Mokey having a baby is kind of strange for me, but she is sort of a maternal figure and I could see that she had somehow taken up where Cantus had left off. The heartbreaking thing was her suppressed grief and how she tried to conceal it with her general manner. You're quite right, she has always been the strong one during challenges and I can understand her wanting to burst at times because of how everyone expects her to behave a certain way.

    What made me sad was that Cantus was no longer alive. Seemed very bittersweet somehow and also a sort of parallel to the real world. I also missed Lanfred. The empty pot just brought tears to my eyes for some reason.

    If I think of anything else, I'll post again. It was a nice story, but I am looking forward to your next update. It did answer some questions I had about the other story, but in some ways, I probably should have waited until you had finished the other one before starting this one. Cantus' grave also made me want to start bawling my eyes out. He's a sort of character I can't imagine dying...he just seems so mystically there.

    My impatience is sometimes a curse. :) Oh well, looking forward to reading more from you.

    ~Yva
  2. wwfpooh

    wwfpooh New Member

    I know. It's like Jim left his spirit with us.
  3. redBoobergurl

    redBoobergurl Well-Known Member

    Finally caught up with this thread! I know you sent me a PM awhile back and I apologize I haven't been able to respond until now. Will you be writing more soon? I like your drawings as well. You really are very talented!
  4. Redsonga

    Redsonga Active Member

    All my newer writing, for the most part, is in the prologue Everything Seems To Sing (or..will be? *lol* you get the idea) and I am also working on the short backgroud story stroy of Boober called Those Of The Black Snow (which is set right after the series).

    *reads posts* Oh boy *rolls up sleeves* Ah hem...


    Thank you : ) !

    She and Boober actually the only ones I can picture having babies. The others, not so much : P

    Now, now..the pot is empty..the pot is empty. That is all I will say...


    Well, maybe, maybe not...It's one of those things...
    I see it as just because he dies in the 'future' does not make the here and now meaningless .If that makes any sense...I would not be writing the prologue if I did not think it was a story worth telling even after nearly everyone knows 'what happens':coy:.
    I do like it even better than this first one to though... :3
  5. wwfpooh

    wwfpooh New Member

    It is indeed one of those things.
  6. Redsonga

    Redsonga Active Member

    *bumpedy*
    My last ending song should be ready by tomorrow...
    Also, how does everyone feel about a story someday maybe set after this one? Good idea, bad idea?
  7. Gold Demona

    Gold Demona Active Member

    If you write it, I will surely read it. =D
  8. Redsonga

    Redsonga Active Member

    Thank you :)! I've just never seen many after 'happily every after' fics done before..well, I mean :p
    I forget if you ever reviewed my other story so far? No hurry, I'm still a slow writer *lol*:excited:
  9. wwfpooh

    wwfpooh New Member

    And Beck, of course, you know I'd read it. ;)
  10. Redsonga

    Redsonga Active Member

    I think I finally got all the bugs ironed out of the edited and spell checked to death version of Midnight Place on FF.Net. I'm wondering if I should repost that version here as it is a better reflection on the story for people that have not read it yet :\...I wish I could edit first posts and put "This has been edited into a more readable version, go here (link)" that would make life so much easier :(. I guess until I find some way to do that I will put off reposting and just post my last Red/Gobo song here soon...
    Oh, and for Mr. Count, this is what the song Mokey sang sounds like (only in Mokey's singing voice it would be much better IMHO).
    I am very sorry for promising to post the last song ages ago, I forgot all about it when I started working on my other stories...So it is really coming this time :p
  11. Redsonga

    Redsonga Active Member

    End credits (as sung by Red )

    Scene:
    An everyday Arizona suburb in the afternoon, Gobo, Wembley and Red last of all appear as they go though the pet door. Red turns around and looks in silent awe.

    Baby, what do you say we just get lost?

    Scene:
    Red tentatively puts a foot on the pavement and then draws it back, only to turn a second later and start hopping up and down on it.

    Leave this one horse townlike two rebels without a cause?


    Scene:
    Gobo and Wembley quickly rush over pulling Red out of the way of narrowly being missed by a car.

    See the people in Boston.

    Scene:
    Close up of Red's face as she coughs from the car's fumes, as the cloud clears to reveal a wide blue sky a slow mischievous smile slowly forms on her face, as she looks down to see the fact that they are all tied together in the usual traveling rope line.

    Ain't your uncle still in Des Moines?
    We can pack up tomorrow.
    Tonight, let's flip a coin...!


    Scene:
    She gives the rope a sharp tug, half pulling half dragging the two along behind her.

    Heads, Carolina Tails, California!
    Somewhere greener, somewhere warmer!
    Up in the mountains, down by the ocean!


    Polaroid photo snapshot:
    The three swimming and doing cannon balls into the ocean.
    The photo unfreezes and Red makes a face after getting a mouthful of salty water from Gobo's splash.

    Where? It don't matter, as long as we're goin'
    Somewhere together. I've got a quarter.


    Polaroid photo snapshot:
    A roll of photo booth stickers of the three making silly faces and Red and Gobo kissing. The last mini picture unfreezes and Wembley pops up between the two, sporting hair newly died bright punk colors.

    Heads, Carolina Tails, California!
    We can load what we own in the back of a U-haul van.


    Polaroid photo snapshot:
    Red, wearing oversized heart shaped sunglasses, a collection of neon colored snap bracelets on her tail, and licking a rainbow colored lollypop proudly drags a giant sack behind her. The picture unfreezes as Gobo gives her a disapproving look, her pigtails wilt as she begins to carry the bag back slowly toward bright "Toys 'R Us" lettering on the side a building.

    Couple modern day Moses', searchin for the promised land...


    Polaroid photo snapshot:
    The three are meditating cross-legged on satin pillows in what looks like a Indian temple. The scene unfreezes and Wembley opens his eyes, slowly tapping the nearby Red, who falls over with a clink onto an incense burner, fast asleep.

    We can go four hundred miles before we stop for gas...

    Polaroid photo snapshot:
    Red, Gobo, and Wembley marching with a line of Japanese kindergartners to school, one of them griping tightly to Wembley's nose instand of his hand.

    We can drive for a day, and then we'll take a look at the map...!

    Polaroid photo snapshot:
    Red, Gobo and Wembley standing in front of Jackson Pollock's "Blue Poles" in the National Gallery of Australia. The photo unfreezes and the three tilt their heads to one side and then the other in puzzlement, turning to each other and shrugging.

    Heads, Carolina Tails, California!
    Somewhere greener, somewhere warmer!


    Polaroid photo snapshot:
    The three are standing in front of a tall sign just out of veiw in the pouring rain: Red wearing her fish costume and big floppy wide rimmed hat, and Wembley wearing sunglasses, swimming fins, and holding a boogie board. The picture unfreezes and both of them turn to glare at Gobo between them as he grins sheepishly, the camera panning upward to the words "Welcome to Sunny Califorina" on a sign.

    Up in the mountains, down by the ocean!

    Polaroid photo snapshot:
    Gobo clinging tightly to the side of moutain with a pick ax as Red begans to loose her grip and Wembley is in the middle of falling, dragging down their climbing rope as a very shocked looking eagle flies just below them.

    Where? It don't matter, as long as we're goin'
    Somewhere together. I've got a quarter.
    Heads, Carolina Tails, California!


    Polaroid photo snapshot:
    The three hitching a ride on the back of a bus bumper in an attached small handmade wooden cart. The picture unfreezes and they hop out, looking upward with wide eyes and then turning to each other with sly grins. The revealed sign reads "Oaxaca Radish Festival".

    We're gonna get outta here if we gotta ride a Greyhound bus.
    Boy, we're bound to outrun the bad luck that's tailin' us!.


    Polaroid photo snapshot:
    Red, Gobo and Wembley running and laughing as they carry a giant Mexican corn god made completely out of radishes. Another photo snaps showing a huge mob of angry people with crafting tools and pitch forks following close behind them…

    Heads, Carolina Tails, California!
    Somewhere greener, somewhere warmer!


    Polaroid picture snapsot:
    Red waves as she windsurfs. The picture unfreezes as she falls off the broad and slowly lifts her head out of the shallow water, only to come face to face with a platypus. Both scream and run in opposite directions.

    Up in the mountains, down by the ocean!

    Pollard picture snapshot:
    A trail of fraggle footprints in the snow, leading to Gobo, Red, and Wembley crowded around something wearing their socking caps. The picture unfreezes and they part to reveal a fraggle snowman with shiny black pebbles for eyes and a mouth made out of sticks with tiny pine cones for hair, in one hand holding a radish and in the other, made as part it's body, a postcard with a Hawaiian sunset.


    Where? It don't matter, as long as we're goin'
    Somewhere together. I've got a quarter.


    Polaroid picture Snapshot:
    A hidden cozy fire in the woods of the snowy mountainside throws a golden glow onto the sleeping faces of the friends under a cozy heavy patchwork quilt, Red with her head snuggled on Gobo's chest, while Wembley in turn leans on her shoulder. The picture unfreezes as Red opens one eye in annoyance, quickly pushing Wembley's head away to use a snowdrift to the other side as a pillow with a yelp and soft shower of flying snow.

    Heads, Carolina Tails, California!

    Scene:
    A slow panning shot from the boots upwards of two silly creatures on that same snowy mountain. The two twenty-something hikers, a woman and a man, stare at the figure made of snow before them. Slowly they turn to look each other in the eye in bewilderment and mouth the word 'fraggle?'.

    O---oh, California! Carolina! California!

    The scene slowly closes in on the fraggle prints in the snow, leading to the radish the snow fraggle is holding, as it's bright green top whips in the wintery breeze...

    The (real) End.
  12. RedPiggy

    RedPiggy Well-Known Member

    *squeals in delight*

    That was EXCELLENT! Each scene is just so PERFECT!
  13. Redsonga

    Redsonga Active Member

    *lol* Thank you :). It was a clear vision I had that I really wanted to show just so to everyone else, so it took a long time...

    And with this post, Song Of A Midnight Place is officially done. Fifty-eight pages and 19,141 words long :excited: *falls over and dies* See self? You can finish stories, you aren't worthless as a writer...
  14. Gold Demona

    Gold Demona Active Member

    That was really neat. =3
    Awesome stuff. ^_^
  15. Redsonga

    Redsonga Active Member

    Thank you :). It is like a movie in my head with these stories and I really just want to share them with everyone...My only fear is that the real FR movie won't live up to fandom ones:coy:...
  16. Gold Demona

    Gold Demona Active Member

    I know exactly what you mean.
    When I was writing my fic, it played out in my head just like an actual episode of the series. ^_^

    And I'm with you about the movie. I hope they don't screw it up. =/
  17. Redsonga

    Redsonga Active Member

    I'm glad you like it...What took me so long to write it was the fact that I was trying to match the pictures and timing in my head just so. It may not look very hard or very long, but it actually is :coy:
  18. Gold Demona

    Gold Demona Active Member

    Oh trust me, I know exactly what you mean.
    It is not an easy thing to synch into writing the actions with the music.
    Many kudos to your brilliant usage of it. =3
  19. Redsonga

    Redsonga Active Member

    *yearly bumpdy for any new member readers*
    This is still my favorite story :)
  20. Collgoff

    Collgoff Well-Known Member

    Well that was nicest thing I ever red and it's nice.


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